reading the first draft of my article. Here is the feedback that I received. Breaking down your article in to sections really helps the reader to understand
- You used the thriller opening sequence as the same example twice - it may be useful to use a different example so that they can see a different angle
- I also noticed you hadn't really written the section or Contemporary Media Issues - i assume that the draft is of half the article? I would advise you to structure this section in the same way you did the last and using a range of examples and angles that could use
-other than those points, I don't see any other way you could improve until you re-draft.
- You used the thriller opening sequence as the same example twice - it may be useful to use a different example so that they can see a different angle
- I also noticed you hadn't really written the section or Contemporary Media Issues - i assume that the draft is of half the article? I would advise you to structure this section in the same way you did the last and using a range of examples and angles that could use
-other than those points, I don't see any other way you could improve until you re-draft.
I feel this is pretty good feedback. I will now need to redraft my article.
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